Today we will look at examples of how we describe percentages in paragraphs. Just as you wouldn't write "He owes me $5 dollars" so you shouldn't write "He lost 50% percent of his marbles" or "4 out of 10% of voters". I noticed many creative (sloppy, incorrect, ugly, redundant) examples today.
Here's what I mean:
- Barnes & Noble's Nook accounts for 28 percent of the market. The new Nook has 50 percent more contrast and 80% less "flashing..."
- The passing percentage for girls is 86.93% compared to boys at 77.83%. The overall results increased to 81.71% per cent this year against last year's 79.87%.
- The combined turnout percentage was 23.5 percent, instead of the 24.4 percent first reported. Democrats had 22.2 percent compared with 16.5 percent; Republicans had 25.4 percent, instead of 37.2 percent. An error on a summary page led to the mistakes.
- Among receivers, Royal’s 3.28% drop percentage (DP) ranked 5th; Lloyd ranked 8th with a 4.94% percentage; Marshall ranked 46th with an ugly 13.13% percentage.
- Stein has a .707 slugging percentage, a .508 on-base percentage and a .976 fielding percentage.
- Portugal has 81% of its total foreign reserves in gold. Italy has 69.2%, Greece has 79.3% and Ireland has 13.3% of its reserves in gold.
- You need to know how far each wedge shot will fly. Think of that distance as a full swing with about 85-percent effort . . . swinging harder isn't necessary, and 100-percent-effort swings will only go higher, not farther.
- The share of Americans who say the price of gasoline is causing them serious financial hardship now tops 4 in 10. Overall, 71 percent said prices cause some hardship. 41 percent call it a "serious" hardship. Just 29 percent said gas prices are not adversely impacting their finances.
- Friday the Dow Jones Industrial Average fell 0.7 percent. The Standard & Poor's 500 index lost 0.8 percent. The Nasdaq composite dropped 0.7 percent. Each index fell by more than 0.3 percent for the week.
- People in San Diego are physically active, eat at least five servings of fruits and vegetables each day, have a low percentage of smokers and a low percentage of people with heart disease. However, we seem to have a high percentage of people with mental health problems and fewer golf courses per capita than other cities.
- The company surveyed more than 6,000 of its clients, 70 percent of whom thought their equipment was suitable. It also surveyed sales staff, who revealed that a like percentage of their clients would benefit from equipment changes.
16 examples of a number followed by the word percent - 70 percent
12 examples of the word percentage following a number - slugging percentage
12 examples of the percent sign following a number - 65%
3 examples of redundant expressions - 13.13% percentage
2 examples of a hyphenated number-word combination - 85-percent
1 example of a ratio found in a context of percents - 4 in 10
1 example of a redundant expression with per cent as 2 words - 87.1% per cent
Some people who apparently didn't like accurate numbers - judging from the expressions like percentage, low percentage and high percentage. Others must prefer precision, because they say 86.93% or .707. One number (13.13%) was described as "ugly".
A novel ratio was introduced in the San Diego example - the golf courses per capita ratio.
A startling number of my examples seem to deal with sports - but I'll let you calculate that per % cent ratio!